Thursday, November 25, 2010

Show, Don't Tell

Recently the children in Mr Salsich's class and 
the children in Miss McGeady's class have been learning to show how a character feels by using descriptive words. 

We enjoyed reading the descriptions so 
this week we had a go too.

Show, Don't Tell.

Did you spot some descriptive similies?
Can you visualise how each person 
was feeling?


  1. w♦ made some pe♥ple funny.

  2. I like it wh♥n I hear the p♔ges turn.:);)

  3. Dear B4,

    You have done an excellent job using details to describe feelings! I could really picture how the different people were feeling.

    Some of the great similes I noticed were: I jumped around like a kangaroo, I was crying like a thunderstorm, I was shouting like a gorilla, I ran like a cheetah, and I felt jollier than a dancing hippo.

    What wonderful descriptions - and I enjoyed flipping the pages of your "book."

    Mr. Salsich

  4. Dear B4,
    I really enjoyed reading your writing! You all did such a fantastic job of describing each feeling.

    I am going to show your book to my students. Maybe they will want to write about feelings too.

    Keep up the great writing,

    Mrs. W

  5. Did you no how I was feeling?

  6. Dear Emily
    You wrote that tears were rolling down your cheeks, so when I visualised that, it made me think that you were sad. Am I right?

    from Mrs M♔K

  7. Mrs McKenzie and class B4November 27, 2010 at 9:56 AM

    Dear Mr Salsich and Mrs Watson
    Thank you for reading our writing. We had a lot of fun with it. It is always nice to have an authentic audience.

    from Mrs M♔Kenzie

  8. Dear Mrs McKenzie you are right I was sad